Alcoholism in Iron Man Comic Book and Film

 Alcoholism in Iron Man Comic Book and Film

I need help to edit and revise my paper. I have already wrote the paper but there were many issues with it.

The goal is to write a focused, thesis-driven essay that features your close readings of, and citations and quotations from, the film(s). Draw from your notes and class discussions. This is not a research paper; it is your formal analysis of the primary source(s). Do not consult other sources.

The professor said the main issue in this paper is that a lot came from secondary sources and it wasn’t my own analysis

To fix this I have to go back to include all the citations and quotations that I have borrowed and browsed from secondary sources. ( I am working on this now)

I need help to come up with more scenes from the movie ( Iron man1) and comic book ( I have attached it) that support my thesis. It is all most be 100% personal analysis don’t counsel any secondary sources at all ( net browser, youtube, etc)

Also i need help to strength this paper because it counts as a final paper ( long paper ( revision of a short paper)

Thank you

Subject: English

I just want to confirm that all must be your analysis from iron man1 and comic book don’t use any secondary at all.

don’t edit my sentences just add new ones ( new paragraphs, the two new scenes, capture them please and write paragraphs)

my thesis is that

The film shows Tony dependent on alcohol, and if this character is a superhero, we shouldn’t see this portrayal, especially since kids are watching. Alcoholism is a weak point in the comic book but minor in the movie ( This was my thesis)

these are previous assginment just to give an idea of this course –  see attached notes

my feedback from the professor is
In your short paper 1 there is information that is coming from Iron Man 2 (2010) rather than just Iron Man (2008) and the comic book issue. There are borrowings from secondary sources as well that went uncited. So for the long paper, my feedback is to put those citations in. Any quotes or words taken directly should be in quotation marks. Any ideas or information should have in-text citations
the main grading criterion is that all the sources are cited and quoted very carefully — you can use secondary sources and the ones you should be cited and quoted

I am working on the citation and quotation now ( myself) and I thought why not to come up with two more scenes or to support my thesis and that will be 100% personal analysis. and if you have any thought and ideas to make the paper strong, as long as not changing my sentences

1 hour ago

two scenes or more *

Find access to iron man movie and use it.

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