revise short paper
Hi, this paper was worked with you about three months ago. since this paper’s final score is 6/10, so I want revised it and put into my portfolio after improve it’s standard. based on experience of revised my major paper and detail following the requirement is nessesary. there are some personal major suggestions: 1. a very specific and clearly main claim comes out at the first paragraph, better at the end of first paragraph; since the topic os this short paper is Writing claims about literature so i think this part definitely important. 2. detailing quote, for example, when the character’s emotional change or action movement? remember this paper’s audience are already watch the movie, so we cannot just summarized but expend and deep it. (take the example about the quote we use at the major paper) 3. arguable opinions definitely gains bonus point.
The film “Killer of Sheep” portrays the African American community in a poor state of affairs whereby the primary focus is on a family in Watts, Los Angeles that is noble but has little opportunities. The main character Stan (Henry Gayle Sanders) works in a slaughterhouse and lives in deplorable conditions with his family. Throughout the film, the lives of the African American characters in the film are viewed in a way to portray the lack of hope, resources, and a………..
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